Can some one help me with my final draft?

Within today's society a lot of children are being raised without their fathers. I would have to use these movies as a reminder of just how important a fatherly bond. is. The impact of both parents on a child's life is primarily what molds them into the adults that they turn out to be. You never know what life holds. Should something happen to one parent or the other parent then that child would need that strong support, guidance, and supervision to see them through into adulthood. You made some very strong points in your essay that leaves room to encourage the bonding of more fathers with their children. It takes 2 parents to make them, so why shouldn't there be 2 parents to contribute to their lives whether it be financially, emotionally, mentally or however the child may need them? I Hope this adds some insight in some way to expand your topic.